Suggestions on my poem? Critique?

halena n

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Ahh, it's a bit rusty, but I only just turned 13. x] And, I was sleepy when I wrote this. Haha. Well, please tell me how I can improve on this...? And suggestiosn for a title.. Thank you.

A POEM BY HALENA N.
Forever the clouds might shiver...
Relentless, the waves will rise.
But even time cannot heal the pain
that passes through these eyes.

The sun might shine tomorrow.
Tears will end next moon.
But time can never mend this heart
The hurt can't end so soon.

I pace the empty, haunting streets
uncovering the night.
I tell them I don't want to win or lose.
I don't want to fight this fight.

I know I've entered the world alone.
I know I'll leave the same.
Yet I still insist I won't win or lose.
I don't want to play this game.

The curtained clouds now roll together.
This is my final act.
The blade is my only solution.
That - I know - is a fact.

My heart frantically skips a beat,
yet still, deeper I press.
This is Death's final question.
My only answer is yes.

I'm slowly slipping off this Earth.
I won't worry of the effect.
I lived alone;I died alone.
I let out my last breath..
 
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