Spring Meadow poem. Is it A+ material for my poetry class?

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Spring Meadow

On this cool Spring day
The crisp air blows lightly.
Tall blades of grass dance.
Trees buds blossom into a million pink bouquets.
Running freely, into the sunset.
On this perfect Spring day.
In this perfect Spring Meadow.


Please rate like a grade, A, B, C, D, or F. Feel free to use pluses or minuses with those grades. Give suggestions, but please be nice. Don't completely pick apart my poem, I worked very very hard on it. I hope you enjoy it and I will take any opinion :)
 
An A- or a B+, I would say! It is very good, though!

The reason I've given you this grade is because
+ You've used personification in the third line, which is a great poetic effect.
+ You've used a metaphor in the fourth line.
+ You've got some interesting diction in there: crisp, blossom, perfect etc
+ There is a strong sense of happy and joyous tone in there!
- If it rhymed it might get you up a small grade (eg A- to A) but it doesn't really matter as non-rhyming, free-verse poetry is becoming more and more common these days (I can't rhyme to save my life)!
- The punctation isn't used to great effect, maybe try switching some full stops for other punctation marks... for example:-

On this cool Spring day
The crisp air blows lightly;
Tall blades of grass dance;
Trees buds blossom into a million pink bouquets,
Running freely, into the sunset-
On this perfect Spring day.
In this perfect Spring Meadow.

I've used semi-colons (;) because they are commonly used for long lists.

-I, myself, don't understand what is running freely, but then again I am really bad at understanding some poems and verses ;)

Good luck, hope you get an A+ and I hope I helped!
 
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