Should I show him the poem?

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I wrote this poem for a boy i love and I dont kno whether I should show him or not. what do you think? also do you have a title suggestion?

Walking along the path of life
I look back and see little light.
Getting stuck in all the love traps
Sadness filled my lungs as I collapsed.
The pain was unbearable
I was ready to give up.
I did for a bit, I must admit.
But then I walked a little further and saw something bright,
it was a light shining there,
right through the night.
It gave me hope and a feeling of safety.
At that moment I knew that everything would be okay
I had found love again
and it was here to stay?
 
I think it's really nice and express your feelings for him, without being too sticky,i hope if you show it to him he really appreciates,most men doesnt like much poems, unless they get in the mood of it.

give it to him in a romantic moment,not when 'you think' he will like it or read it,

i hope he enjoys it<3
 
if he's your boy friend it couldn't do any harm, if this is just a guy you really like don't this most likely to scare him away. the poem i think needs at the end some where along the the lines it was you and im here to stay,
 
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