Rough poem, help me make it better? Thoughts appreciated also...?

Kristin

New member
How to love
when the heart won't allow?
Go on, explain
to me...

How to love
with a heart of gaps, and
many mis-sewn patches?
Delight me with
these stories...

I want to learn how
I hear it would do me well
to love when I should
the one who gave me a heart

But would you know
how they cut?
Could I show you how?
My heart's on the table
no good mending it now

It's all beyond repair
I'm all ruined now
they, who I should love
have fallen through the hole in my heart
How could I love?

I know punctuation needs to be added...sentence structure isn't the greatest and I didn't intend it to be. Please, if it's bad, let me know why. I really do want to improve. I'm a beginner and I just now wrote this so it's rough rough.
 
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