Readers: Opinion of my story starter?

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very rough draft, though. what do you think? thanks =]

"I'm nervous." The shrieks of the bitter wind made my voice almost inhaudible. My teeth chattered together noisily and I shook as the coldness clawed at the skin of my arms.
A frown creased my temple as Robbie rolled his hazel eyes. "Don't act like you've never done it before." His voice was laced with amusement, and I wasn't the only person who noticed it. Marie nudged him violently in the ribs, sending me a small smile before turning back to face HugoBruno's nightclub.
Robbie was right, I had done it before. It didn't stop the fact that every time I thought about it it seemed that a million knives were stabbing at my body, coming to avenge me for my sin.
"It's murder!" I spat, tone iced with disgust so strong I had to stop myself from recoiling in shock.
Robbie scoffed irritatingly, taking a step towards the entrence of the illuminous building which was blaring music and flashing almost every colour imaginable. "I think you forget the fact that they don't count. They're Demons."

 

[HP Wombat]

What is happening?

This is dialogue and action without any kind of "grounding" whatsoever. I have no idea where I am or what's going on. At first I thought they may be skydiving, with how extreme the description of cold and wind were. So then they're waiting in line for a night club, and talking about Demons? Like? Real demons?

It's just confusing. You haven't established anything for the reader, instead just barreling forward with the story, expecting that the reader will somehow keep up.

 

[Me Myself and Google]

ok, so it was really good but, it sounded like the beggining of a book i read city of bones, bcs a guy and a girl go into a nightclub and they r dealing with demons to so i would change it. but read the city of bones books if u havent.



can you answer mine??
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=Akb1wNakiJx8WeWDVQJ7386IxQt.;_ylv=3?qid=20110625143031AAomcSL