Read this poem if you like; tell me what you think?

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Within the fire's malice burns the clutching thoughts to all
That darkness's glimmer catches the falling ice to freeze all within its evolution.
Human's cynical wants bewitching the blood ruby to fall into the next generation.
So shiny it glitters within the sun's light; with the sun's burn.
Try to catch it if you like, the selfish wants bringing forth the changes unto a world where the rain can pierce and tears fall within eternity.
Blood, staining the glass, wants, staining our Earth.
This dirt loses its water within our wants, and dries within the desert of pain.
 
Its not to bad, Ive heard better. Are you troubled by something? It almost sounds you are hurting or have been hurt in some way? A lot of times Poets write about their feelings or their past happenings.
 
I think it's actually great! There's a little mystery to this poem and bitterness. It makes it seem like the earth is filled with sadness but in a good way.
 
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