Read the poem and offer suggestions if you would please (:?

Torri

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Rest your head on my shoulder,
tommorow is another day.
don't let your tears stain your cheeks,
there is another way.
Embrace tommorow and get lost in the moment,
you never know hich is your last.
overcome the fear that's habited by choice,
don't let this one chance pass.
if your down and blue
I'll be here for you
photo.Heart.Mind and soul
don't make gabriel come for you,
your time has yet to toll
my mistake was leaving
but I stay within your mind
just let me go I know it's hard
but I promise it's me you'll find
I'm up above looking down
your guardian angel, I'm always around
 
thats good but i personally dont like it when you use names in your poems
mine? http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AhV1zzRgiq9kDp7msXYn9XgazKIX;_ylv=3?qid=20090917171513AAnJhgb
 
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