Rate these lyrics from 1-10? 10 being excellent, 1 being horrible?

Donald

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I wrote a song called "Why":


Why? - Donald Simmons

Today you rejected me
Gave me an easy letdown
The I Just Got Out a Relationship Stuff
But that ain't flowin with me

Why?
Why would you play with my feelings?
We've been friends since October
And now i see what i have to do and
You're not my friend anymore.
We're enemies. GOOD BYE.


Your easy personality and looks caught my eye in the beginning
But now i know that cute girls are the devilish types
They befriend you and then they
Expect you to like them, and when
You ask her out, she tosses your feelins out the door

Why?
Why would you play with my feelings?
We've been friends since October
And now i see what i have to do and
You're not my friend or my crush anymore.
We're enemies. GOOD BYE.

And if you rate my song a 1: What can i do to improve it? 10: What was the best element or your favorite part of the song?

Answer mine and i WILL answer yours
 
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