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I have a beat for it already, I wrote these lyrics and I already saved them by self-sending an email. It's a love song about a girl I like, most of it's true i guess. I don't know if I should find an excuse to show her, that would be stalkerish.
Any things I could do to make it better? It's weak in several places. The lyrics are rap except the chorus. I'm not done the second verse, I wrote this on computer in a few minutes.
I see you all the time
five days of the week
where you do your work
I visit just to get a peek
at night I pray for you
till the morning light gleams
I don't wanna go to sleep
now that life is a dream
the way you get your work done
the way work don't get to you
how it's school in the day
work a few night shifts too
you still make time to look good
something about you just so hood
putting down arrogant rich kids
like they just up to no good
I just want to let you know
I'm liking what I see
so if you wanna make it happen
it's gonna be about you and me
(chorus: sung)
and cause you're just so much more
more than a woman
a gift sent from heaven
makes you more than a woman
I wanna ask you if you're a real angel
but I don't cause I already know too well
that you're more than a woman
more, more...
the way you dress
you never cease to impress
I almost start to call you
your royal highness
her majesty
or a princess
could I be your prince
don't be heartless
... i'm not done yet.
btw this is second time posting, no results last time.
Any things I could do to make it better? It's weak in several places. The lyrics are rap except the chorus. I'm not done the second verse, I wrote this on computer in a few minutes.
I see you all the time
five days of the week
where you do your work
I visit just to get a peek
at night I pray for you
till the morning light gleams
I don't wanna go to sleep
now that life is a dream
the way you get your work done
the way work don't get to you
how it's school in the day
work a few night shifts too
you still make time to look good
something about you just so hood
putting down arrogant rich kids
like they just up to no good
I just want to let you know
I'm liking what I see
so if you wanna make it happen
it's gonna be about you and me
(chorus: sung)
and cause you're just so much more
more than a woman
a gift sent from heaven
makes you more than a woman
I wanna ask you if you're a real angel
but I don't cause I already know too well
that you're more than a woman
more, more...
the way you dress
you never cease to impress
I almost start to call you
your royal highness
her majesty
or a princess
could I be your prince
don't be heartless
... i'm not done yet.
btw this is second time posting, no results last time.