Rate my poems please?

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Shopping
I love to shop I shop ‘till I drop I go to all the stores It’s like shopping galore
Going shopping, searching, looking
Picking choosing, feeling touching
Pushing shoving, down the aisle
Walking round for miles and miles

Classic Shopping
Busy people moving fast
From store to store to store.
Need to find it
Need to buy it
More and more and more.

Shoes and shirts
Accessories
Who cares the price?
It's just so nice!
I need it, oh how,
I want it, oh now!



i had 2 do this project on shopping and i wanna know if my poems are good and im 11 so am i a god writer so far
 
I actually really like this. Writing poetry on shopping is and interesting idea. For 11 years old I would say you should keep writing. I have read many rubbish poems on this site, but your poem captures the feeling of shopping at a crazy busy disgusting store- like WALMART.
 
I actually really like this. Writing poetry on shopping is and interesting idea. For 11 years old I would say you should keep writing. I have read many rubbish poems on this site, but your poem captures the feeling of shopping at a crazy busy disgusting store- like WALMART.
 
I actually really like this. Writing poetry on shopping is and interesting idea. For 11 years old I would say you should keep writing. I have read many rubbish poems on this site, but your poem captures the feeling of shopping at a crazy busy disgusting store- like WALMART.
 
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