Rate my poem,out of 10?

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Reem h

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i'm 15 yrs old...wrote a couple of poems,actually i've always been writing ever since i was like 10 or something...and this is one of them,request more if you like it ;p:

Hidden grief

Lately i'm the stongest
known here and there
i seem to be the best
almost everywhere
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but when i get home
i sit on my bed
lock myself in my room
forget the life that i lead
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i become me again
i let out all the tears
i release all the pain
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'cause inside every man
there's a weak little child
who is of perfection
started to get tired
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now that i confessed
i hope i'll change
forget the tears i shed
and ascend to a higher range
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End


hope you liked it!

P.S:you need to know that English isn't my fisrt language...and that i need constructive critisizm not a destructive one :)
thnx u every1
 
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