Rate my poem 1-10, help me what should i change in your opinion?

seexxii cat

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Intro: i wrote this thinking of being a cheerful loner, and "my love" is myself. i'm writing about me as an onlooker who loves me.

my love has been exploring
every day once thrice with pay
to the people who ask for my love's love
she cried and bind
she love the loathe
she eat the loath
she kissess all there with her smile,
for it's for every-one
i loved you my love
you turn to ether and i can no longer SEE you
my love my love, my love....
 
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