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DraumrKopa99

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It's about an enchanting experience I had during summer vacation:


This summer, my family and I spent a week of July in the quaint sea side town of Ningaloo, located in the western extremes of Australia.
One day, a scuba diving session was scheduled for our family. Looking at the calm, cerulean blue surface one wouldn’t expect to see something stupendous underneath it but all my incredulity vanished as the flurry of bubbles which shrouded my vision as a result of diving into the water cleared and revealed to me a colourful underwater metropolis of coral.
I tried to exclaim “wow” but what came instead were a few bubbles through my diving mask as I saw the eerie brain coral, the peculiar table coral and the rainbow of colours which painted these underwater marvels making them look astonishingly beautiful. The striped clownfish, the colour changing cuttlefish, the Yellow Tangs and the little damsel fish increased the beauty tenfold.
All of a sudden, a huge figure loomed up from behind the reef from which I was plucking samples. It was at least 12 metres long and had a black body which was striped and spotted with pale blue. I immediately recognised it as a whale shark and didn’t panic as whale sharks are known to be very docile creatures. The titan serenely floated over to me and gave me a playful nudge. I realised it was a friendly creature so I grabbed onto a fin gently and to my surprise the creature began to swim, pulling me along for a ride. I mounted onto its back, holding onto its fin for support. It was like riding a horse except much more exciting. The shark began to move up and down, twisted its body and swam in loop de loops with such speed it was like an underwater roller coaster! Before I knew it the shark began to swim towards the surface and it actually leaped into the air like a dolphin. It was truly an enchanting experience with the salty sea wind in my hair, a beautiful sunset and riding my new friend (whom I incidentally named _____)!

See the "_____" well I can't think of a name for the whale shark. Any suggestions please? (But not Shamu...)
 
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