Proofread my slam poetry and tell me what to improve( my teacher said the minimum...

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...is 16 lines)? In reality everything is tragedy,
Tragedy is inessentiality.
Tragedy is a part of youth,
Where nothing is smooth.
We live for the thrill,
This is overkill.
We need more time,
To fix our crimes.
We die for no reason,
Because of territorialism.
We need more peace,
Not more deceased.
We all love life,
More than our wives.
We need to think,
Not eat antidepressants.
Tragedy is a part of our life,
Face it, tragedy is the core of reality.
 
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