okay so this is my first time writing a college essay it may not be the best but please revise it and see what i can do to improve it.
btw my essay is about how my son changed my life
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here it is:
The eyes of the angel looked straight at me, innocence indescribable. My heart lifted with emotions I’ve never experienced, a feeling that will last forever. It had been 3:20 Sunday morning; warmth filled my cheeks with every tear streaming down as I held him for the first time. The pain was unbearable but I managed to pull through for him, four hours of my life that turned all my dreams and goals around. Everything felt unreal; I knew my life would change forever. This angel sent from above will leave footprints behind me everywhere I go.
I never quite knew what people meant when they said a love for a child is unconditional, until now.
I looked at the red light outside the window, I kept hearing voices but the pain blocked out the sound, could this really be happening to me? I could hear the doctors and nurses talk but I did not listened to what they were saying, my mind was focused to the thought of being a new mother. Pulse racing, pressure rising up, hands shaking, feet curling, everything felt like a dream and there was no waking up. As the hours went by, my body grew exhausted, the nurse shouted out “Your almost there!” but I knew I wasn’t. The time passed by in a slow pace and I could not bear it.
Soon the pain was over and the time went by faster, after four hours it was over. Nine months of anticipation was over, my life will no longer be the same. Soon I was holding my own flesh and blood; this fragile human being was mine to look after. I no longer was I looking after my future but my son’s. Cradling him in my arms, my tears hit the sheets like a steady beat, meeting him for the first time I already loved him with a burning passion I would think only a mother would know. Through all the new experiences and feelings, I will watch my son grow and I will show him through my mistakes how to be the best person he can be.
I realized that overcoming the obstacle of being a mother at a young will be a challenge however, I am determined to be the best not only for me but for my angel. Through the nine months of waiting for him to arrive I learned how to grow up and mature. I learned how to learn from my mistakes, making me a stronger, better person. I know what it means to have unconditional for a child. Gazing into his eyes I knew he will follow me wherever I go, with his footprints that will follow behind me, I no longer will be alone.
btw my essay is about how my son changed my life
)here it is:
The eyes of the angel looked straight at me, innocence indescribable. My heart lifted with emotions I’ve never experienced, a feeling that will last forever. It had been 3:20 Sunday morning; warmth filled my cheeks with every tear streaming down as I held him for the first time. The pain was unbearable but I managed to pull through for him, four hours of my life that turned all my dreams and goals around. Everything felt unreal; I knew my life would change forever. This angel sent from above will leave footprints behind me everywhere I go.
I never quite knew what people meant when they said a love for a child is unconditional, until now.
I looked at the red light outside the window, I kept hearing voices but the pain blocked out the sound, could this really be happening to me? I could hear the doctors and nurses talk but I did not listened to what they were saying, my mind was focused to the thought of being a new mother. Pulse racing, pressure rising up, hands shaking, feet curling, everything felt like a dream and there was no waking up. As the hours went by, my body grew exhausted, the nurse shouted out “Your almost there!” but I knew I wasn’t. The time passed by in a slow pace and I could not bear it.
Soon the pain was over and the time went by faster, after four hours it was over. Nine months of anticipation was over, my life will no longer be the same. Soon I was holding my own flesh and blood; this fragile human being was mine to look after. I no longer was I looking after my future but my son’s. Cradling him in my arms, my tears hit the sheets like a steady beat, meeting him for the first time I already loved him with a burning passion I would think only a mother would know. Through all the new experiences and feelings, I will watch my son grow and I will show him through my mistakes how to be the best person he can be.
I realized that overcoming the obstacle of being a mother at a young will be a challenge however, I am determined to be the best not only for me but for my angel. Through the nine months of waiting for him to arrive I learned how to grow up and mature. I learned how to learn from my mistakes, making me a stronger, better person. I know what it means to have unconditional for a child. Gazing into his eyes I knew he will follow me wherever I go, with his footprints that will follow behind me, I no longer will be alone.