Poetry? Please don't be afraid of criticizing my poem?

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My poem is titled Caged.


trapped behind bars unseen
like a bird clipped of freedom
so much to feel
let the doors open
so I might fly
into the night
and into the dark
let me fly
with wings spread out
soaring into the stars
nothing holding me down
caged
 
thats so beautiful.i wish i could write poetry like that.mine are always sappy love 1s
 
i think it is a really great poem bravo keep writing u got it in you
good job
and this is to JPA u don't know what poetry is u keep trying to bring ppl down to ur level dude face facts everyone is better than you
 
Its good it looks like having a moral behind but I think you should add more rhym to it I mean the end words of the lines should have same tone like fly,sky or something like that
although the thoughts g8
 
You seem to be a sensitive person, who loves freedom and respect it.
the more you write poems, the better they will be.
good luck
 
It's a nice poem, full of sensibilities and colors. But I don't like the title. Given the chance, I would change it to Drugged which is more powerful and graphic. But Caged is okay too! Congratulations for a well-written poem.

Good luck to you.
 
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