poetry help please!!!!!?

Babe(:

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can someone help me make this more poetic.
maybe bigger words?
help me out please.

Break Up Confusion

I lay in bed, thinking of my past summer.
What went wrong?
Why did I mess everything up?

He seemed perfect: good looks, charming smile, and most of all, he always made me laugh.
I felt that it was meant to be.
When he looked at me I would get butterflies in my stomach and would smile so big that my dimples would show.
He thought my dimples were cute, I was embarrassed.

Things seemed just right.
Until, Out of nowhere, he stops talking with me,
I was completely bewildered and heartbroken.
Did I not meet his standards?
I thought for hours on end.

I decided that I wouldn’t give up.
I made every effort I could to talk or be with him.
I became obsessive.
Every time I heard someone even mention his name, I would go crazy.
And to this day, it’s the same way.
I never hear from him anymore.
Sometimes, I ponder.
Does he ever miss me?
Does he even remember me?
I’m not sure if I want to know the answers to those questions.
I need to forget my past, and enjoy what I have now.
 
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