This poem is for my FINAL EXAM. If you could review it and give suggestions I would be super grateful. Easy 10 points!
Give advice for additional lines, what things I could change, etc.
Thank you !
a white purse full of pencils
broken glasses and glass houses
she has a way with the words that don’t belong to her
she boards the night train under the weight of
empty birdcages and silver teacups
pulls out her ticket, waits for the conductor
her head pulled upright, a marionette, nodding polite
alone, swallowed by her possessions
she dreams
of the color green and of skipping stones
a million wooden faces
and the paradox of living without strings.
Give advice for additional lines, what things I could change, etc.
Thank you !
a white purse full of pencils
broken glasses and glass houses
she has a way with the words that don’t belong to her
she boards the night train under the weight of
empty birdcages and silver teacups
pulls out her ticket, waits for the conductor
her head pulled upright, a marionette, nodding polite
alone, swallowed by her possessions
she dreams
of the color green and of skipping stones
a million wooden faces
and the paradox of living without strings.