okay, so i'm 13.
i wrote this today for an english poetry assignment..
is there anything people think i should change.. to make it sound better?
Young and stupid,
ripped wide open,
lives are wasted while hearts are broken.
Love is the enemy,
for it only causes broken hearts.
Someone always ends up grieving,
with their life torn apart.
Tell me, where do the tears go when they don't show?
And what are you supposed to do when your on a constant low?
When the only one who can make you smile is causing all of your tears..
When you feel like you'd be better off dead,
how do you deal with all your fears?
please, please, please comment.
i wrote this today for an english poetry assignment..
is there anything people think i should change.. to make it sound better?
Young and stupid,
ripped wide open,
lives are wasted while hearts are broken.
Love is the enemy,
for it only causes broken hearts.
Someone always ends up grieving,
with their life torn apart.
Tell me, where do the tears go when they don't show?
And what are you supposed to do when your on a constant low?
When the only one who can make you smile is causing all of your tears..
When you feel like you'd be better off dead,
how do you deal with all your fears?
please, please, please comment.