poem i wrote for someone any good? help please?

shelly

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And since the day i set my eyes on you, i've had this strange feeling
And everytime i saw you, it grew and grew
And now i think it's safe to say i've fallen for you
When i see you my heart it races
Your words make the world seem like a blur
Nothing matters when i'm with you
It's how you make me feel like none of this will change in time, to know that i'm yours and you're mine
It's your eyes and how they meet mine
The sound of my voice and how I've never seen such a smile
That lights up my face like an innocent child
I've never seen such lucid eyes,
A stare that seems to hypnotize
And it's funny how you can lighten up my day, just by being near
I couldn't tell you how much you mean to me even if i had the time
Because it's something not even words can describe
When you hold me tight, everything feels alright
You give me such a reason to smile
Your touch, your laugh, your hold
Nothing could compete with how you make me feel
I swear it's almost surreal
And in all i've ever known
You could probably make hell feel like home
I never want to lose you
Because when your near i feel complete
There's something about you that makes me feel at ease
Something about you that makes me want you never to leave

is this any good?
i think i need to add something else in the very beginning or maybe at the end, idk i think it's missing a lot.
opinions? or any ideas?
pleasee.
:]
thanks!
 
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