Poem help! Please! easy 10 pts. Is it good?

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Okay so i had to write a poem about someone in English class using only their possessions . I'm in 10th grade so yea.

Andrei’s Possessions

A sketchbook sits on the table. It seems blinded by the light; old and tattered. It’s binding still strong, a black shell with blank pages. Locked in a cabinet, the book finally seems to be breathing again; after a long sweltering summer.
Inside his backpack, loose papers fill the empty void where a binder once was. A mistake to not buy binders joyfully melts off his shoulders. He does not mind.
A camouflage Velcro wallet hugs last year’s school I.D cards, like an old friend holding on to its only companion. The outside is worn. The print; fading.
An Iphone drowning in Metallica, Iron Maiden, and free demos of last year’s games. Its only cry is a ringtone of Stairway to Heaven.
The sketchbook is placed in the main backpack pocket, along with the loose papers and no binder.
The camouflage wallet is placed in his pocket. His phone is hugging his other side.
Possessions:
-sketchbook
-loose papers
-camouflage wallet with last year’s I.D cards
-Iphone with lots of rock music and games. The ringtone is stairway to heaven.
I need to use personification and metaphors.
 
You have some good images here, but others are mixed up. A sketchbook can't see, so it can't be blinded. How can you see what the book is doing if it's locked in a cabinet? A mistake doesn't melt.
The velcro wallet part is very good. An Iphone can't really drown in music, especially when you say that the only sound is the ringtone.
Try binderless backpack pocket instead of no binder. Read this out loud and change anything that doesn't make sense to you.
 
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