poem feed back please?

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didi [[the one and only]]

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im an ammiture basically, i started writing a few years ago. its pretty deep annksd personal so please give me honest feedback ? thanks :)

I don’t know who I am,
I need help finding myself.
It is like I am stuck in a clam,
My life story, empty, on my top shelf.

I’m lost on a lonely road,
I don’t know where I belong.
I have nothing else to show,
So how am I supposed to be strong ?

I feel empty as if I’m nothing,
And mp one can see what lies inside.
I flash a smile, but I’m just bluffing,
What I really do deep down is cry.

I’m just trying to find my place,
But no one can really see.
When I look in the mirror I see a disgrace,
And I know that’s all I can ever be.
 
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