Poem: Did I break any rules in this Villanelle?

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Amanda

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The day my heart knew sorrow
Tiny hands and little toes
Hide in the pains of tomorrow

The weight of all that is hallow
Swaddled in warm cotton clothes
The day my heart knew sorrow

Unprepared and feeling sallow
What will your strange future show?
Hide in the pains of tomorrow

Love’s Light I beseech to borrow
Unthinkable darken woes
The day my heart knew sorrow

Too grateful I should wallow
Bright eyes and a tiny nose
Hide in the pains of tomorrow

Hannah, my delicate rose,
How could I ever let you go?
The day my heart knew sorrow
Hide in the pains of tomorrow
 
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