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Ann

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Hey could you all please rate this poem? Please give me a number from 1-10, constructive criticism and please tell me how old you think the person that wrote this is. Thank you :D BTW its a free verse so there is no rhyme scheme.


Say you’ll never let me fall
That you’ll be there through it all
Through my tears
My irrational fears
Help me see good in so much bad
Make me laugh when I am sad
Love me
Please

I ask of you to much
To the fading hope left I clutch
You say were to different
That I am not enough
It can never be
I just wish you could see
What it is you do to me
Accept me
Please

I keep losing my place
I’m searching for a deeper meaning
In those words you said
I’ve made myself believe it was all in my head
Without you I am lost
And I can feel the sadness creeping in like frost
Freezing my soul and heart
Thaw me
Please

I hate you now
For doing all this
Even though I know you didn’t mean to
Rip my beating heart
Out of my chest
And leave me with the emptiness
That eats me from the inside out
You left me breathing
But not alive
Fix me
Please

I fled and ran
I guess nothing ever goes
According to plan
The pain follows my every move
If I pretend long enough
I wont feel a thing
I’m slowly become stone
Everything that you’ve told me I’ve know
I just didn’t want to believe
Lie to me
Please



I can’t live this life
Theres nothing to do but grab the knife
A sweet release is all I ask
I can’t go on wearing this mask
For I am stuck in prison
You hold the key
But I guess death will have to be the one
To set me free
Save me
Please
 
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