For class we had to write a villanelle. I'm not that great at writing poetry and would like some comments/tips. I also don't have a title yet so I'm open to suggestions
Our friends gather around the midnight flame
Watching each other, faces so bright
in riotous laughter we feel no shame
thrusting our fists like champions in fame
We begin with vigor and might
Our friends gather around the midnight flame
Like serious jesters and mocking dames
joys and cheers salute the night
in riotous laughter we feel no shame
taking another drink a man takes aim
as he rolls up his sleeves, looking to fight
Our friends gather around the midnight flame
when Gray and blacker the night became
time feels to slow, and I start to lose sight
in riotous laughter we feel no shame
waves of color, red and blue coming to end the game
as I stumble towards the glowering light
our friends gather around the midnight flame
In the background you can hear them give false names
Beneath the shining silver light
In riotous laughter we feel no shame
our friends gather around the midnight flame
Our friends gather around the midnight flame
Watching each other, faces so bright
in riotous laughter we feel no shame
thrusting our fists like champions in fame
We begin with vigor and might
Our friends gather around the midnight flame
Like serious jesters and mocking dames
joys and cheers salute the night
in riotous laughter we feel no shame
taking another drink a man takes aim
as he rolls up his sleeves, looking to fight
Our friends gather around the midnight flame
when Gray and blacker the night became
time feels to slow, and I start to lose sight
in riotous laughter we feel no shame
waves of color, red and blue coming to end the game
as I stumble towards the glowering light
our friends gather around the midnight flame
In the background you can hear them give false names
Beneath the shining silver light
In riotous laughter we feel no shame
our friends gather around the midnight flame