please rate my poem...wat do u guys think?

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poem's called Lies, based on past friendship

Lies

I’m consumed with hate
I can’t wait to take
You down
Pull you to the ground

I’m done with being nice
You’re precise
Sometimes I gotta stand up for my right.

I can’t bear looking at you
You make me fierce
You turned me into a bloody monster
This girl never wanted to be a haunter

My thriving hands are shaken
Thinking about the past
Thinking about your freakish laugh

I hated the way you befriended me
You took away the light
You took away my precious night
You brought in hell
You set me under your spell

I won’t take your lies
I won’t take your shit
All I need was for you to admit.....


there's actually more but let me know what u think?

there's some in between but just read this

Lied to me
One more time
I won’t take your bullshit

Cuz I learned to burst
I learned to curse
I’ll be waiting
I’ll be laughing
I’ll be thinking of slashing


blah, blah, blah

there is an ending to this....wat do u think?
 
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