Please rate my poem, i am also open to suggestions?

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(She)
She scares people, she intimidates them, and she’s proud of it.
She feels superior and she feels their respect.
When in reality they fear her, hate her, and want to kill her.
Her laughs come from their tears of sorrow.
They work as hard as they can until their hands bleed to simply prove her wrong, they can be somebody in life against all odds.
She looks upon the successful in disgust, she looks upon the superior with jealousy.
When she’s mad, she makes them feel guilty for her faults.
It’s not their fault.
She makes fun of their fruitless attempts to be successful in life.
She makes fun of their misery.
She makes fun of their pain.
She makes fun of them for her enjoyment
In moment of darkness they have thoughts of murder and suicide, but they have hope that one day they will be successful against all odds, and the memory of the evil She would just be a nightmare of the past.

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I have recently been abused by my mother, and I wrote these poems out of my own depression.

God bless
 
I think it's good
but i think it would be better to make a poem of things getting better
Maybe you can do that after this poem
or you can make a funny poem (something that cheers you up)
sorry about what happened to you though
feel better!
 
i loved it!
you really do have a talent!!

Stay Strong, pray and enjoy the good things of life
it will get better!

God bless you as well
 
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