please rate my poem 1-10?

David

New member
wrote it for a girl, which i hope to read one day



Here I lay next to you
with all my dreams come true.
I couldn't think then
anything better, than to be with you.

your eyes are like a million stars
shining in the night.
Even though you do not know,
It is true I love you.

My only wish is to kiss you
so I can feel your gentle lips.
My heart has only one desire
that is to see you smile.

Because from just that act
I feel like I'm a God.
What many say it isn't true
I just care about you.

While I lay next to you
with all my dreams come true,
I keep thinking about
how much I love you.

Now with nothing else to say
I hope you have a nice day.

-by David
 
Back
Top