Johnny sat in the driver’s seat hoping he’d be safe from Catherine’s violent outbursts. “I’m going to kill her,” Catherine stood in front of Becky’s house her hands tightly fisted struggling to decide what to do. Jean walked up behind her, the aching in her face returned. Catherine knew was so angry she could hardly see through the hate. Jean didn’t know how to stop her, she wrapped her arms around her hoping she would calm down. “I’m sorry I have to do this,” said Jean. Catherine took a stepped forward she was so enraged she didn’t hear Jean’s voice.
Jean quickly put her arm around Catherine’s long neck. She threw her against the front of the car. Johnny flinched as he watched in shock. He couldn’t believe he was watching Catherine getting manhandled. She slowly turned around looking up at Jean in terror. She was thrown so hard she almost chipped a tooth, “Jean why did you do that to me!”
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Jean quickly put her arm around Catherine’s long neck. She threw her against the front of the car. Johnny flinched as he watched in shock. He couldn’t believe he was watching Catherine getting manhandled. She slowly turned around looking up at Jean in terror. She was thrown so hard she almost chipped a tooth, “Jean why did you do that to me!”
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