Please help...... admission essay....unusual circumstances?
can anyone help me? the deadline is tomorrow...here is my essay for my unusual circumstances....
Essay for Unusual Circumstances
The first seventeen years of my life is like a piece of dark chocolate that carries a taste of bitterness yet brings a sense of happiness. As far as my memories can take me, I have a father yet I am fatherless. I do not see my father more than two times a year, thus I do not know how it feels like to have a father. My happiness solely depends on my mother, thus I became very close to her. At the age of eleven, my parents got a divorce because of his intolerable, violent behaviors. Deciding to start a new life, my mother brought me and my brother to America where I will master another language and learn many valuable experiences. I transferred through three elementary schools and two junior high schools. When my “family” moved from north to south in 2006, I find everything drastically different, especially the lack of transportation, for my mother does not know how to drive. Thus, in my freshman and sophmore year, the lack of transportation not only deprived my of many volunteer opportunities, but also made me having to walk 1.5 miles to school everyday despite harsh weather. However, I believe that the hardest part for me was to transfer during my junior year to a different high school, where I have to cope with different environment, standard, and curriculum. One of the deepest academic regret that I have is that I was not able to accomplish three years of foreign language because the new school does now provide Japanese language whereas my old school does. I also felt depressed when I have to leave all my friends and happy memories behind. After many emotional struggles, I finally come to realize that no banquet lasts forever. When the banquet ended and the people dismissed, life still goes on.
can anyone help me? the deadline is tomorrow...here is my essay for my unusual circumstances....
Essay for Unusual Circumstances
The first seventeen years of my life is like a piece of dark chocolate that carries a taste of bitterness yet brings a sense of happiness. As far as my memories can take me, I have a father yet I am fatherless. I do not see my father more than two times a year, thus I do not know how it feels like to have a father. My happiness solely depends on my mother, thus I became very close to her. At the age of eleven, my parents got a divorce because of his intolerable, violent behaviors. Deciding to start a new life, my mother brought me and my brother to America where I will master another language and learn many valuable experiences. I transferred through three elementary schools and two junior high schools. When my “family” moved from north to south in 2006, I find everything drastically different, especially the lack of transportation, for my mother does not know how to drive. Thus, in my freshman and sophmore year, the lack of transportation not only deprived my of many volunteer opportunities, but also made me having to walk 1.5 miles to school everyday despite harsh weather. However, I believe that the hardest part for me was to transfer during my junior year to a different high school, where I have to cope with different environment, standard, and curriculum. One of the deepest academic regret that I have is that I was not able to accomplish three years of foreign language because the new school does now provide Japanese language whereas my old school does. I also felt depressed when I have to leave all my friends and happy memories behind. After many emotional struggles, I finally come to realize that no banquet lasts forever. When the banquet ended and the people dismissed, life still goes on.