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A girl sits at her windowsill:
The same time every day.
A boy walks by, shovel in hand:
She watches as he walks away.
When the sun is high, he strolls through town.
The people stop and stare.
It drives them crazy, he always goes,
But none of them know where!
This girl, she frowns. This boy, he smiles.
As he wanders into the woods.
She doesn’t go to meet him,
But her heart tells her she should.
So day by day, this boy he goes:
Comes back with dirty sleeves.
His face is scratched, his shirt is torn,
His shoes covered with leaves.
The girl sits at her windowsill.
He is always in her head!
He walks on by, she wants to stay,
But she follows him instead.
Step by step, she walks the road:
The road turns to a path.
She follows his footsteps, for nearly an hour
She finds the boy at last!
She angrily says, “Why do you come here every day?
Nobody in town knows!”
He looks ashamed, he whispers softly,
“Because I planted you a rose…”
How would you change this. Are there any areas that flow akwardly or where I could change the wording?
The same time every day.
A boy walks by, shovel in hand:
She watches as he walks away.
When the sun is high, he strolls through town.
The people stop and stare.
It drives them crazy, he always goes,
But none of them know where!
This girl, she frowns. This boy, he smiles.
As he wanders into the woods.
She doesn’t go to meet him,
But her heart tells her she should.
So day by day, this boy he goes:
Comes back with dirty sleeves.
His face is scratched, his shirt is torn,
His shoes covered with leaves.
The girl sits at her windowsill.
He is always in her head!
He walks on by, she wants to stay,
But she follows him instead.
Step by step, she walks the road:
The road turns to a path.
She follows his footsteps, for nearly an hour
She finds the boy at last!
She angrily says, “Why do you come here every day?
Nobody in town knows!”
He looks ashamed, he whispers softly,
“Because I planted you a rose…”
How would you change this. Are there any areas that flow akwardly or where I could change the wording?