Please answer! What do you think of my poetry?

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Raney

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Saphire Eyes

I look into your eyes,
your saphire eyes
and I'm suddenly content
because I'm lost in the
jewels behind your sockets
shining and gleaming
holding their gaze.
How can I look away?
I do, soon, and I regret it
the real world is nothing
to the beauty of your eyes
your saphire eyes.
Is this love, or is passion?
Is this emotional, superficial?
I don't know, I can't resist
I give into your eyes
once more
I'm changing it from sockets to lashes, it sounds more poetic.
 
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