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It is not finished but what do you think of these lyrics so far?
(Intro)
Blessed is the man who does not walk in the counsel of the wicked or stand in the way of sinners or sit in the seat of mockers. But his delight is in the law of the Lord, and on his law he meditates day and night. He is like a tree planet by stream of water, which yields its fruits in season and whose leaf does not wither. Whatever he does prosper. Not so the wicked. They are like chaff that the wind blows away. There for the wicked will not stand in judgment, nor sinners in the assembly of the righteous. For the Lord watches over the way of the righteous , but the way of the wicked will perish.
(Verse 1)
Branded for the damned, sixes on my wristes
Religious proprieties got me livin in tragedies
Visions of the heat invadin my sleepes
Beggin Jesus for forgaveness
Knowin I’ve done wrongness
Hopen hes got one more blesses for my messes
Bullet Proof vestes upon my chestes
Tapped in the head it’s a shame no one left in the game
(Verse 2)
Blood caught in my trachea visions of life six feet under
Knowin I ain’t makin it to the pearly gates
Kicking it with shaytan in the lakes
Looking for an escape beyond my gape
Unable to grap what I can’t take
Life full of mistakes and fakes
Then I wake in the dead of night
Sweat drippin like I just got out of a fight
Afraid to sleep at night Know that he might
Take my life before I had a chance to make it right
 
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