Opinions on this poem i made up? Is it good or should i fix it a bit?

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(btw it's for my parents)

You've been getting ready for Christmas
We've all been excited for this day
Your credit card cracked and your freezer is packed
Because you've been crazy shopping for the holiday

This time of the year is such a big fuss
Dressing and decorating must be a bust

You guys work tirelessly
To make this the best time of the year
Everybody get's grumpy and grouchy i know
Becuase everybody is going insane when Christmas is near

But on Christmas morning it's all worth while
To see everybody filled with joy and smiles

So to thank you for spreading the cheer and doing much work
for going through much trouble and still blooming smirks

I say Merry Christmas and thank you
And never forget i love you too...

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I think near the end it's pretty sucky. What do you think i could do to make it better?
Thank you:)
 
aw thats pretty good =) i suck at writing poems so i can't really help you there.. but i think its good, and your parents will deffinetly like it.
 
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