Opinions on a poem I recently wrote?

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Kirstie M

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I wrote this a few days ago, it might need more editing, probably, i haven't checked for that to be honest. what do you think of it though? thank you :)

Well I owned my mind,
And I owned my thoughts and my words.
I knew myself better than anyone else.
But then you came along, and I lost them all.


I can no longer rely on my mind, because there you are.
And my words have stopped helping me, when I can muster any at all.
And this feeling of vulnerability is troubling to me,
I was so use to feeling empty, and now I just long for the sea.


Its taken a while to gather my mind,
And to think of our future as appose to the night.
Because maybe I don’t know you, like you think I do.
There are words for you, that I cannot think and cannot write.
 
I Think This Poem Is Really Great, You Have Used Very Imaginative Words For Describing The Feelings. If I Wrote This Poem I Wouldn't Use The Well At The Beginning. I Hope That Helped You. And I Think Your Poem Is Great.

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