Only 15, need critique on this free verse poem?

I don't know if you could call this a poem exactly, more of a collection of thoughts. Tell me what you think!


This feeling, you've injected. My mind, you've infected. All my secrets, you've collected. My smile, you've perfected. All my scars, you've corrected. Your girl, you've elected. The walls to my castle, you've protected. My conscious, you've affected. The boresome, you've expected. My suspicion, you've detected. Cause and effect, you've connected. All this time, you've reflected. My deserving, you've neglected. My well-being, you've respected. The choice, you've selected. My words,
you've dissected. My reasoning, you've objected. My diary brought to light, you've projected.
 
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