Old poem I wrote, what do you think?

[James]

"A new dawn"
As she sits and stares into the night sky
wishing and wondering about the way things were
watching the stars and the moon searching for answers
Light on the horizon breaks her thought
from thoughts of the past
to thoughts of today
as I take her hand we watch the new dawns break
then we leave that lonely hill
fallowing in the new dawns wake.

 

[godsnarnialover]

I really like that. I know how she feels, and someday, someone will take my hand. Good job. Keep up with it the good work.