Ok, less darker poetry.. thoughts>?

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Ok..so you people didn't seem to like my poetry from my darker days. I guess the world is all butterflies and gumdrops to some people. Regardless..here is a lesser suicidal one.

Crave.

consistently lacking in an attempt to be something to all
stumbling on your jagged words,
making me feel this small.
Although slaying,
I admit to a truth you display
there is no happiness without hurt
there is no tomorrow without yesterday

At any time, there may be a shedding of skin
something more I can give to you,
having you need me again.

It always seems that something is standing between us
an unsettling high that feeds us
leaving you, then coming back for more
a thirst that's much worse than before.
 
I liked your other poem but this one more so...it seemed to have more depth of meaning, but that's simply my opinion..maybe you should consider publishing one of the two, they were both really good.and a question...The person was craving a realationship with another???
 
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