I need to find a better last line for this poem...
All the world is cold tonight
Cold and harsh and cruel
And I escape into the warmth
To small to be a pool
Under water all is silent
All is peace and calm
I close my eyes and let it come
It drifts just like a song
Tonight I will escape from here
Tonight I am set free
From all the lies of perfectness
That I have tried to be
I wait awhile I stop to see
Will someone come to rescue me
But no one came and no one cares
So on I go in dark despair
A silent struggle from within
Has finally now been lost
The waters warmth erases pain
That people only brought
My problem spot is " lost and brought ... also tell me what you think...
By the why since people didn't understand the line “to small to be a pool” earlier when I was asking about it...
I will tell you that the whole poem is in reference to a suicide plan involving a hot tub... true story.
"at what people made me cost"
will think about that one
All the world is cold tonight
Cold and harsh and cruel
And I escape into the warmth
To small to be a pool
Under water all is silent
All is peace and calm
I close my eyes and let it come
It drifts just like a song
Tonight I will escape from here
Tonight I am set free
From all the lies of perfectness
That I have tried to be
I wait awhile I stop to see
Will someone come to rescue me
But no one came and no one cares
So on I go in dark despair
A silent struggle from within
Has finally now been lost
The waters warmth erases pain
That people only brought
My problem spot is " lost and brought ... also tell me what you think...
By the why since people didn't understand the line “to small to be a pool” earlier when I was asking about it...
I will tell you that the whole poem is in reference to a suicide plan involving a hot tub... true story.
"at what people made me cost"
will think about that one