New Original Tune, Vocals?

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venice w

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So im new so HELLO hahah also this is the first thing i have ever done vocals on and i was hoping you could give it a listen and let me know what you think i wrote it as well so judge the vocals and writing

thanks

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the first half of the vocal part (in the verses) reminRAB me of a popular song I've heard many times. but then the second part sounRAB original, so all is forgiven.

all i would say is double up on your rhythm guitar tracks and pan them hard left and right to make the recording sound bigger.

but your drummer is SOLID. and the vocals are spot on - in terms of rhythm and melody and pitch i mean. just try not to rip other songs off and you'll be fine. you may have not even done that on purpose...

i give the song 5 stars - production 3 stars

...and uhh - i think the song would benefit from having a simple bass line in there.
 
The vocals are fine, just watch your pitch on some of the lower register stuff, (which is surprising).

As far as the music, it works, but having a bass player might add a little more diversity to the verses and chorus, but it doesn't sound too bad the way it is.

Care to post lyrics?
 
Not a bad first song for a band at all. A few parts are maybe a little generic and the production wont get you noticed but it's good for a demo.

The chorus melody is pretty damn catchy, sounRAB a lot like early Thursday, funny enough.
 
I know I'm late but I had to chime in... I love the melody in the chorus! Very original and fun to listen to. The verses could us a little more variety (moreso for the first verse, the second was better) just because they started to sound repetitive. But the rest of the song easily made up for it, a beautiful first piece! :)

... and good luck with finding a bass player, lol!
~ L
 
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