What do you think of my erotica story?
I have been working on it for a while and occasionally updating it but I need you people's opinions on it. Thanks.
She was about to penetrate again into his protuding wrath. Looking upwards, she gazed at the sweaty, skinny and fragile nerd looking straight at her with surprise. Wearing thick framed glasses, his black hair appeared greasy with the sweat running down his forehead. ''Go on'' she had commanded the nerd, as she rubbed his hot, sweaty neck as she prepared to give a well deserved b. j. The nerd seemed reluctant, and smiled. ''I have another suprise for you.'' As he stood up, and got dressed. Wearing tight black trousers, and a white shirt. ''sit down on the bed for me.'' commanded the nerd, as he prepared for what he was about to do. The woman did what the nerd said, and sat on the bedside, smiling at him. ''I can tell you are going to deeply enjoy what I am about to do'' the nerd sat on the middle of the bed, his head touching the wall,and his legs slightly bent. ''Get inbetween my upper legs'' said the nerd, smiling deeply at the woman as she obeyed the nerds orders, and lied her head in between his thighs. ''A little closer'' said the nerd. The woman laughed, and got closer, almost lying on the nerd's lower belly ''Is this enough''? She questioned. ''Perfect.'' Replied the nerd, quietly. Suddenly the women felt a huge pressure on her neck. ''You b@stard! Let go of me!'' ''No.'' his thighs tightened around her neck, his leg crossed over the other so his thighs were now in a crss-cross position. The nerd giggled quietly. The women was fully concious, and could still breathe. A couple seconds had past of silence. The woman began to struggle continiously, quietly whimpering as she slapped the lower part of his leg repeatedly to try and get him off. Nothing worked. The nerd tightened his death grip even more. Sounds of choking flooded the room. ''What's the matter, can't breathe?'' giggled the nerd. The woman becan to flail her arms in a desperate attempt to be set free. The nerd knew this was happening, so he grabbed her wrists tightly and held them together. He slowly tightened even more. Until all that could be heard was the mild sound of choking. The woman squirmed mildly and uncoordinately as she began to weaken, her face now blue from lack of oxygen. The nerd tightened his death grip for the final time - until there was nothing but silence. Faint cracks were heard coming from the broken bones in her neck, and her wiggling had ceased. The nerd had let go of her corpse, and then proceeded to fcuk her dead body.
I have been working on it for a while and occasionally updating it but I need you people's opinions on it. Thanks.
She was about to penetrate again into his protuding wrath. Looking upwards, she gazed at the sweaty, skinny and fragile nerd looking straight at her with surprise. Wearing thick framed glasses, his black hair appeared greasy with the sweat running down his forehead. ''Go on'' she had commanded the nerd, as she rubbed his hot, sweaty neck as she prepared to give a well deserved b. j. The nerd seemed reluctant, and smiled. ''I have another suprise for you.'' As he stood up, and got dressed. Wearing tight black trousers, and a white shirt. ''sit down on the bed for me.'' commanded the nerd, as he prepared for what he was about to do. The woman did what the nerd said, and sat on the bedside, smiling at him. ''I can tell you are going to deeply enjoy what I am about to do'' the nerd sat on the middle of the bed, his head touching the wall,and his legs slightly bent. ''Get inbetween my upper legs'' said the nerd, smiling deeply at the woman as she obeyed the nerds orders, and lied her head in between his thighs. ''A little closer'' said the nerd. The woman laughed, and got closer, almost lying on the nerd's lower belly ''Is this enough''? She questioned. ''Perfect.'' Replied the nerd, quietly. Suddenly the women felt a huge pressure on her neck. ''You b@stard! Let go of me!'' ''No.'' his thighs tightened around her neck, his leg crossed over the other so his thighs were now in a crss-cross position. The nerd giggled quietly. The women was fully concious, and could still breathe. A couple seconds had past of silence. The woman began to struggle continiously, quietly whimpering as she slapped the lower part of his leg repeatedly to try and get him off. Nothing worked. The nerd tightened his death grip even more. Sounds of choking flooded the room. ''What's the matter, can't breathe?'' giggled the nerd. The woman becan to flail her arms in a desperate attempt to be set free. The nerd knew this was happening, so he grabbed her wrists tightly and held them together. He slowly tightened even more. Until all that could be heard was the mild sound of choking. The woman squirmed mildly and uncoordinately as she began to weaken, her face now blue from lack of oxygen. The nerd tightened his death grip for the final time - until there was nothing but silence. Faint cracks were heard coming from the broken bones in her neck, and her wiggling had ceased. The nerd had let go of her corpse, and then proceeded to fcuk her dead body.