About a bi-racial girl(half-black),raised by her white father and stepmother and passed off as white.She has lily white shin,gray eyes,and her father's red hair.Her father makes passes at her,tries to rape her,and beats her for any little thing,because every time he looks at her,he remembers that he had an affair.
The girl endures all this,until she's 12 years old and her father,nearly kills her.Her stepmother takes her to the hospital,where the doctor rants that the girl's tail bone is fractured and he's going to call the law,because she's been beaten.His exact words are,"What in the H*ll have you been hitting this kid with?Or maybe you just threw her down the da*n stairs!"
The girl is sent to another state to live with her great grandmother and older half-sister,who ran away years ago.While there she notices that some young men are doing odd jobs for her great grandmother and seem very curious about her.Often eavesdropping on conversations between her and her half sister.Finally they ask her what her name is,she lies a little and tells then her nickname.One day she notices that one of the boys has dropped his Bill fold.Inside she sees a picture that looks a lot like she did as a baby.She returns the bill fold at their home and feels quite uncomfortable,while she's there.Since,the boy's mom keeps staring at her.
Besides getting her home life back on track.She is excelling at her mathematics academy and on her way to graduating two full years early.There's a boy that she likes,but is afraid of due to what her father did to her.And loathes herself for looking so much like the man who caused this whole mess.
Does this sound better written in first or third person?
The girl endures all this,until she's 12 years old and her father,nearly kills her.Her stepmother takes her to the hospital,where the doctor rants that the girl's tail bone is fractured and he's going to call the law,because she's been beaten.His exact words are,"What in the H*ll have you been hitting this kid with?Or maybe you just threw her down the da*n stairs!"
The girl is sent to another state to live with her great grandmother and older half-sister,who ran away years ago.While there she notices that some young men are doing odd jobs for her great grandmother and seem very curious about her.Often eavesdropping on conversations between her and her half sister.Finally they ask her what her name is,she lies a little and tells then her nickname.One day she notices that one of the boys has dropped his Bill fold.Inside she sees a picture that looks a lot like she did as a baby.She returns the bill fold at their home and feels quite uncomfortable,while she's there.Since,the boy's mom keeps staring at her.
Besides getting her home life back on track.She is excelling at her mathematics academy and on her way to graduating two full years early.There's a boy that she likes,but is afraid of due to what her father did to her.And loathes herself for looking so much like the man who caused this whole mess.
Does this sound better written in first or third person?