My poem, please read and tell me what you think?

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I haven't written a hatred poem for a long time but I gave my love my life, to this guy and promised him happiness yet he refuse to take it and left me. He refuse to give me a second chance like I gave him. I was left at home suffering and punishing myself every night and crying. The moment he said, "I never want you back" my whole body became numb.
Any suggestion to make this better, please tell me :)
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I woke up choking, struggling for air
I’m short of breath, heart’s beating in pain
My heart’s in the hand of the demon of despair
The fear is making my mind insane

Every night this shadow stands by my bed
Choking my neck and ripping my heart
Putting all these voices in my head
Giving me hope then ripping my skin apart

I filled my heart with hope and love
Forgotten the grief, Forgotten the pain
Prayed for guidance from the sky above
Trusted the false just to feel like I’m sane

My heart only ached for one more chance
Begged the demon to let me free
To reunite with my love, my perfect romance
But I was left dead with terror that I hadn’t foresee

Leaving me with a heart as dark as death
My mind’s too shaken, my vision collapse
Look in to my eyes, there’s nothing left
Traded my heart just for hollow crap

Befriended with lies and unchained your heart
I have blindly free you in to the wrong direction
The stronger my love, the further we part
My love is now a crime, a fatal injection

My gift for you was my heart to take
Lets throw it away like it’s decayed flesh
Trapped in my promise, a promise I won’t break
Now it’s solitude I choose until I’m none but ash

This is the path I have fallen to face
I’ve became my own hate that I’m sick of feeling
Being unbearably punished in my own disgrace
I’ve became my own saviour to stop me from fading

Forget the past, Forget the future
Forget everything that had ever existed
I’m just a blemish in your life that’s nothing but torture
Forget the memories and let it desist

The air sweet with wings now dark with scars
Too afraid to turn back, too afraid to fly
Given up your wish on the shooting star
The wish came true but it never got through your eyes
I am in coma, let the lies eat my mind
Hyperventilate with the voices shattering in my head
Leave me alone where I was left behind
Burden from the past and what lies ahead

This love now fear on the string of a promise
Buried inside a heart as deadly as death
No more to believe, nothing to miss
This love locked away forever from everything that’s left
 
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