my friend needs some mental boost for his poetry, can you look at this poem of his?

Savvybabe

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Every day I see you in my eye,
Wishing to go over and say hi.
But I'm afraid to go talk every day,
So with some poetry I shall play.

You eyes shine the the stars,
Moving around planet mars.
When I see you I wanna talk,
But my feet just won't walk.

When I see you I feel so good,
But you always end up putting up your hood.
I ask you things but you say no,
Just come with me to a place we'll go!

My love for you is forever and always,
And I smile when seeing you in the hallways.
Your really shiny hair and smile so great,
I wish we could just start on a new slate.

So now I ask on this special day,
If you'll be my valentine just for one day.
If you say no I really won't care,
I just thought we'd make a good pair.

he made it , and I think its just plain amazing ! (: but he needs some more courage, help ?
 
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