My first poem please give feedback.?

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My eyes feel like they have liquid metal inside.

They are cold hard like when someone's died.

As I walk, I drag my feet like a weary man.

My head is bowed to hide how ashamed I am.

I have been removed, and have the status of unregisterd.

Without worth too those that have status and are registered.

A human being that has been stripped of all basic rights.

And everyday is an individual that fights to see the daylight.

How can a man that has an illness, be left to fend for himself.

Just swept aside as other's watch his deteriroating health.

All this is a reminder to me, all of this is true.

Being an alocoholic you have to drown first, before you are rescued
 
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