My first free verse poem.. what do you think?

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I'm 15 and i usually write rhyming poems but today i tried to write a free verse one.. please don't be harsh, it's honestly my very first try. thanks... here it is:


The Innocence in their eyes

Gentle whispers escaping their lips

Sitting by a fire with rosy cheeks

Minature hands building and playing

Jumping in puddles, soaked from head to toe

Smiling and giggling, having so much fun

Let kids be kids, we were like them once.




Comments please. thankyou everyone.
 
I like it all, except the sitting by the fire is sort of not in line with the other "activities". Overall, I give it a great start!!
 
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