more, a English writing's here, check it for me.?

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Alex S

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here goes.


"He was deprived of dreams he had for four years in four days."

my intention was to use the word 'deprived'.

and, he has dreamed for four years,

and it was deprived in four days.

at last, all information have to be contained with single sentence.

so, you may write better than me.



flock to it, suggest freely

some help would be thanked!
"In just four days, he was deprived of his four years' worth dreams."

it's more clearer.

but, could 'four years' worth dreams' part be changed into more easy word?

if possible, i would like to omit 'worth.'

suggest some substitutions please.

my thanks~!! all you are very kind~
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"...... , he was deprived of his dreams of four years."

can it be right and more easy to be read by English beginners?
 
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