Kurt Cobain Poem 1967 - 1994?

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Its better to burn out, then to fade away.
This was the suicidal note, from kurt Donald Cobain.
He was himself, yes. he was on smack.
He didnt care if he had a heart attack.
Loved his music, it was played well,
But something changed, we began to tell.
It didnt effect him, to admire or envy.
Not like the love and adoration from Freddie Mercury.
He Needed to be slightyly numb, in order to regain-
The enthusiasms as a child, back again.
Why doesn't he enjoy it? He Doesn't know himself.
Is it the Fame, the glory or the weatlh?
He had it good. very good hes grateful,
But from the age of 7 he became hatefull in general.
He lays back in his chair, sipping on the rum,
And thinks about the deathrocker hes become.
And then He thinks about, the roar of the crowd,
His stomach would rumble. the crowd's too loud.
Missed gigs, Too many drugs, no hope.
They started to see he that couldn't cope.
Please get through, for Frances and Courtney,
The news came in at quarter-to-three.
Cobains dead,
Shotgun shell through his head.
Suicide note left, he wrote before,
People knew He couldn't cope anymore.
But was it a suicide? no it couldn't of bin
He took 3 times the overdose of heroin.
It was murder, it has to be.
The door was locked from the outside, no key.
The shotgun handle was to big to hold to pull the trigger,
How did he shoot himself? Arms couldn't get any bigger.
He wouldnt be able to lift up the gun.
The skag in his veins made him weak and dumb.
He would be collapsed on the floor, an overdose like that,
Which proves this wasnt a suicide act.
It was manslaughter, no, a murder infact.
But no one believes it, think hes a prat.
'He must of killed himself, he was recked on drugs.'
NO It was murder you little thugs!
He wasnt just some twat and a prick and unhealthy.
He was a legend in rock, a hero, have Empathy.

Kurt Cobain 1967-1994.


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the poem is saying he was murdered you nob head, andd you just put he blew his brains out with a shotgun. go back to nursery rhymes mate
 
>capital K--KURT
>who loved his music they them ???
>he really didn't care
>but
>could be written rather grateful
>death rocker hes now become
>They who is they??
>The news came in at a quarter til three here I would put his full name myself and say>> he was dead
>people knew that he couldn't cope any more
>he had wrote it before hand or something along this line
>been not bin
>come on now what the heck is a prat??
>Twat think of something else here it really takes away from the poem it's self by using trash words you want the next generation to read it and enjoy plus remember a person was has died but had great talent and he died before his time don't you at least need to word it so it can be read by all and not just a few in years to come?? Think this over O.K.
>Leave out PRICK don't like it don't need trash words ruins the poem altogether

Now that I did your rework up go back leave out prick it doesn't fit sorry but you are a very talented person and I know you can do so much better then this yet I loved the poem all in all needs some basic reworking and I hope you take the time to do this because it is a great reminder to the world that a very talented person might have then again might not have taken his own life and your right it is worthy of being a reminder to the world at large. Thank you for sharing this I really enjoyed it and no I'm not one of his fans so I liked it enough to take time out to try and point out some flaws which I think will help it flow better and work together so it will be timeless. Don't listen to the nonsense keep your eye on the prize mate. I think it is very, very good poem ...as it is ......but truth is it could be GREAT!
 
The rhyming couplets make it sound like a nursery rhyme. Not good when you're writing about a tortured soul who blew his brains out with a shotgun

Kurty had a loaded gun
He couldn't take no more
So Kurty kissed his final sun
And splattered on the floor

See what I mean?

He wasn't murdered though he did himself in
 
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