Is this what you call poetry? or am I losing mine? Critiques welcomed.?

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Waking Up
by Sandy

A flame burns deep within
few have every known. Hidden
from the world, yearning to escape.
waiting to be seen
by one such as you
fan the embers into a roaring fire.

Flooding over me, wellsprings emerge.
Your devices, your words, a passion unheard.
Out pour them on you as waves o're the sea;
flood dry parched lands, drench them with my love.

A covering of joy to overcome all barriers
not afraid to show such passion to all.
Tingling ignites throughout my being;
knowing you are near, close to the tapping--
your warmth engulfs me, I disappear.
Stronger I become, obstacles o're come.

Fingertips lightly touch my soul as a painters
brush upon the canvas, colouring my world
with hues from dreams.

My eyes wide open, I breathe in your embrace,
Encompassed by your wings, protecting me from harm.
Desire satiated, passion fans the flames
Raging through my heart.

Soaring above the clouds, running through
streets--pure gold, held by your love
all pain falls away.

Waking from the vision set before my eyes,
I feel you inside--our hearts beat in time.
Jasmine fills my senses as a smile curls
my lips, to kiss you would be to die;
live on heavens shores. Embraced by
your love that stretches beyond time and space.
Strength rises--my pen begins to write.

What words could be found
to describe my love to others...

his eyes like pure emeralds
cheeks as rubies red
wisdom beyond the ancients
strong arms, gently lift me up
so soft and warm they wrap me
I meld into him

where do I begin~where does he end?
 
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