Is this poem truly good? I really need to know because I wanna publish a book of...

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...poems...? The Dark Sea

I see no end to these cryptids that lurk in the dark sea

They dart around me just to see me flinch

I don't know whether to scream or laugh

I am scared and confused and that is what makes this special

That is why it won't last forever

Nothing is here now just the Dark sea and I

No creature can survive here, except the ones that seemingly don't exsist

A hot feeling stockes my underside

And a deathly afraid sense comes to mind

Something unseenn watches me as I panic

I am mostly afraid of why I can breath under this water

The thing lets out a hollow laugh

I float downward and down until the dark above seemed light

It is so dark I close my eyes to see light

Now a cold burstes out above me and I wait

Unseen creatures are circling and watching me I can feel it

Until one comes into my eyes reach

It is a horribly apaulling dinosaur like thing

I almost die with fright

Until I come to my senses and I suddenly realize I can swim

I swear there is no surface to this lake

Darting upward I feel I am being followed

Breaking the surface there is nothinng but fog

and I swim towards the way i feel shore is

Suddenly I feel a wet and soggy blanket type thing that is shore

My terror is over

And my survival adventure is about to begin

what do you think?
 
double-spacing = hard to read as a poem
in my opinion, anyway.
Also, when you're writing free-verse, it helps to have some kind of rhythm or alliteration. Get rid of some of the smaller words such as "and" in some lines, and add them in others. It helps me sometimes to read it and kinda snap my fingers to keep a beat.
Look at syllables too, that also helps. There's a million and one ways to get some rhythm in a poem ;)

Otherwise, it's very good. Keep up the good writing, just remember rhythm.
 
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